Obsession by Greyscribbler

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Obsession by Greyscribbler

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There???s a new story out on the EMCSA titled ???Obsession??? by Greyscribbler ???The tale surrounds a young woman named Melissa, and her growing obsession with the life-like mannequins that appear in some local shop windows. No mad scientist???s labs or deviant trickery involved, but it does take you along on a nice, gradual descent towards frozen oblivion???

http://www.mcstories.com/ObsessionGreys ... index.html
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What is the freeze method? is it realism like yours or is it magic like?
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That will be revealed, but you'll have to be patient

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I liked it. Nice slow boil, and really focuses on her mind changing, shifting, and her needs and wants adjusting accordingly. Hope to see more.
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I love it so far! She's such a lucky girl. I can't want to read what happens next!!
Thank you for writing it!
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Thanks for the feedback always appreciated!

I've sent the next part to the website, so hopefrully it will be there this weekend.

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Nice reading!
I like it, that the girl is getting soo intense feelings from thinking about being a mannequin;
but despite Melissa is trying to be silent and rigid during her climax, her fingers are still activly probing herself;
I'm curious about your solution, when she cannot use her finger for more than a few hours ...

and
"to look more like a mannequin":
on one side I'm happy, that there will be progresse even the same night,
on the other hand: I like also yet another week of anticipation, small doubts and more desire filling Melissa's mind and preparing her for the next step ...
(I must not complain, my stories are stuck in the drawer, because I cannot find the equilibrium between going forward into the display and yet another preparation/anticipation ... :( )
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... Part 4 is up - more is revealed ;-)
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Part 5! Way..

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Part 6 is up... anticipation is building...
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Conclusion is posted; excellent finish, with a possible thread to a sequel. Kudos!

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